dactylic hexameter(?)

Greek Homeric Greek and Early Greek Poetry
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This is a paraphrase of Blake’s line “To see a world in a grain of sand” composed by ChatGPT in Homeric Greek fitted into dactylic hexameter:

ψάμμου ἐν ἀγκαλίδεσσιν ὁρῶ κόσμον θεοειδέα

My best scansion is

ψάμ-μου ἐν | ἀγ-κα-λί|δεσ-σιν ὁ|ρῶ κόσ|μον θε-ο|ει-δέ-α

    • | - u u | - u u | - - | - u u | - -
      (the second and the third syllable together, and also the last two syllables, are considered a long syllable by synizesis.)

What do you think?

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It’s a very good line, but your scansion of it is not quite right: ψαμμου εν is a dactyl (-ου in correption before εν).
The imagery of “in the arms of sand” (ψάμμου ἐν ἀγκαλίδεσσιν) is intelligible but spoils the idea of a single grain, and I’m not sure about ὁρῶ (“I see”) for “To see." But the expansion of “a world” to κόσμον θεοειδέα (a godlike world) is admirable.

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Thank you for your enlightening reply. The paraphrased line actually deviates a bit from the original wordings, but I think it captures the general idea. Thanks especially for the correction of the scansion.

Regards.

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Is “in the arms of sand” actually intelligible? The visual metaphor of Aristophanes/Archilochus’ κυμάτων ἐν ἀγκάλαις is immediately clear to me, but maybe I’m not imaginative enough for ψάμμου ἐν ἀγκαλίδεσσιν.

κόσμον θεοειδέα fits the meter at least.