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Elegia Pro Solzhenitsyne (in memoriam)

Postby Kasper » Mon Aug 04, 2008 5:36 am

Elegia Pro Solzhenitsyne (in memoriam)

dum virtus ursi confusae mens et hominis,
impetui veri quit retinere nihil.
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Postby Twpsyn » Mon Aug 04, 2008 2:48 pm

Your grammar is rather odd, and the first line doesn't scan. (hominis).
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Postby Kasper » Tue Aug 05, 2008 12:27 am

Thanks for the comments Twpsyn.

Well, it is poetry of course, or at least language set to meter, and the grammar tends to be a bit odd. Are you saying that even when compared to poetry the grammar is (too) odd? If so, why?

In prose the lines would read:

"dum virtus ursi et mens hominis confusae [sunt], nihil impetui veri retinere quit."

You'll have to forgive my lack of experience with latin, but why is this odd?

re 'hominis', i believe it scans short-long-short. This seems to scan fine?

Thanks in advance!
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Postby Twpsyn » Tue Aug 05, 2008 2:16 am

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